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Sunday, November 3, 2013

201. Light

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“You know the code?” asked the chief.
He nodded.
“Repeat the code”, the next guy spoke in a low voice.

“Sir, one light: “stay where you are”, two lights: “move forward safely” and three lights:  “move back”.
The chief laughed like Gabbar Singh!

The young man had a question, but sensing the antagonism he kept quiet.

They started towards the forest.
“What if there is no light?” he asked slowly.
“There will be no light today. That will end the darkness” an old man uttered smilingly.  


He realized that they had a plan to surrender the chief to the authorities.

(*This is a Drabble)
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21 comments:

  1. Vinay Leo R.November 4, 2013 at 11:11 AM

    A good story. A little confusing though, for me.

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  2. Sreeja PraveenNovember 4, 2013 at 12:38 PM

    "There will be no light today. That will end the darkness”...
    The highlight of this piece !!
    Good one, aativas.

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  3. UnknownNovember 4, 2013 at 6:24 PM

    Exceptional application of the prompt!!!Exceptional writing as well!!

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  4. UnknownNovember 5, 2013 at 12:06 PM

    A good twist in the end. Nice work

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  5. TCPCNovember 5, 2013 at 12:22 PM

    Well, i am little caught who is who in this! so much for it being a drabble perhaps! :) a good concept though

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    1. aativasNovember 5, 2013 at 4:23 PM

      Yes Akila, I realize that using drabble to write this story has its limitations. The story needs more space.

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  6. the little princessNovember 5, 2013 at 1:44 PM

    nice one! making the poor boy memorise all that code when all he wants to do is surrender!

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    1. aativasNovember 5, 2013 at 4:25 PM

      the little princes, I guess there is some confusion. The young man is not aware of the plan of surrender - at least that is what I intended. I guess this story is little confusing :-)

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  7. SimranNovember 8, 2013 at 12:09 AM

    bit confusing in the last..

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    1. aativasNovember 8, 2013 at 7:43 PM

      Simran, I agree. I should not have used Drabble for this story!

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  8. CifarNovember 8, 2013 at 3:15 PM

    to keep it a Drabble,you have compromised with the plot of this story,

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    1. aativasNovember 8, 2013 at 7:38 PM

      Yes, I realized it later .. this plot needs full story!

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  9. MeghaNovember 9, 2013 at 12:32 PM

    I think there was confusion because an adjective for chief is needed. Chief of dacoits etc. In the end it gets clear. Nice. I like it.

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  10. Shashiprakash SainiNovember 10, 2013 at 12:59 AM

    थोड़ी पेचीदा पर अच्छी रचना

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  11. MenacheryDecember 10, 2013 at 7:53 PM

    http://sameoldnewstuff.blogspot.in/2013/12/guess-who-came-along-liebsterrrrr-yayyyy.html - a lil surprise for you

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